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Can someone please edit my poem for grammatical mistakes?

yeahim such a great writer and im horrible at grammar. This is the poem i wrote about the Holocaust after reading the book Night by Elie Wiesel.Winter’s cold breath still blows hereas it did sixty years ago.The snow still falls hereno longer tainted by the ashes.The smell of it still lingers thoughthe smell of the burning bodies.The screams still echo hereyou can still feel the horror and the pain.The hopelessness of the lost soulslike a silent film or an abandoned house.The memories of these souls imprint themselves.Can’t you see the ghosts of those long dead?The snow falls silently,black with ash and cold to the touch.It smells like death and tastes like sorrow.Seems this ground will never be healedIt has been consecreted by the falling ashlike dark snow It falls and engulfs the land in a blanket.It makes the shadows dance like spirits trying to be freed.The piercing winds burn my facelike the fires of hell or of Auschwitz?These memories will never dieThey are buried here forever under the falling snow.

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I would create a fire plan, and do monthly fire drills. Be sure your children can follow it. Try, giving you 6 year old, the job of helping the other children out of the house. Perhaps, you'll need to move your youngest down stair until s/he is no longer in a crib. Buy the fire ladders, the kind that go on the windows. Teach your children how to use them. If needed have your husband build a windo box, around the ladder, so that your children do not have to attack them to the window. They just have to open the window box. Be sure to have a safe spot. Tell the children if there is a fire, to met you at the mail box, or a neighbors house. Teach them fire safety: Stop, drop, and roll, to feel door before opening it, etc. Teach them if they can't go down the stairs, than it's ok to break a window (if they can't open it) the important thing is to get out of the house, and to help each other get out of the house if they can. As far as someone breaking in: get a dog, and train him. Don't go over board, a dog that barks at someone is enough to give you warning that someone is in your home. You don't need an attack dog around your children. Have a plan. If someone breaks in: it's mom's job to get the children and dad's job to keep the robber busy. (fight, or do whatever he can to give mom enough time to get the kids out.) Figure out who will call 911. Protect your house, with things you are comfortable with. Keep a baseball bat next to your bed. Our house was broken into, a few month ago. it's a very scary feeling. Luckily no-one was home, when it happened (1 PM on a Sunday afternoon). We went to our local home store and purchased a few item to make our home safer. Noise makes that go off when a door/window is open. (can help with you children also, if they open a window/door you'll know it.)
You cannot start a fire by pointing a blow dryer at water but if the water gets into your blow dryer, it could cause an electrical short that could cause a fire
You could cause a short circuit, which could start a fire, but most new houses have ground fault indicators on bathroom circuts, which trip when the current gets too high. More likely way to start a fire is leave the hair dryer on some towels and walk away.
No. But you could electrocute yourself if water got into the electric hairdryer.

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