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Anyone care to edit this?

Driver rams bulldozer into traffic in Jerusalem, killing two.The issue is parallel verb structure. Give me an answer that utilizes parallel verb structure and you will win!

Answer:

I would write it this way: Driver in Jerusalem rams bulldozer into traffic; kills two. Or perhaps: Driver rams bulldozer into Jerusalem traffic; kills two. Either way also eliminates the slight awkwardness in the original phrasing.
A driver rams a bulldozer into traffic in Jerusalem, killing two.
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