This is an assignment for English, based on john Updike's quot;Beer Canquot;, our assignment was to describe a soda can in a paragraph, I was wondering what you thought and what I could change?The soda can is a disgusting objectNever mind that the pop top looks like a toilet seat, and who would want to put there mouths on that? Especially when you consider the amount of spittle that clings to the indented rim, that the last sip is always backwashIt can be ignored when you grip the slick cylinder that rests perfectly in the curved palm and open the top of the toilet seat lid (was not everyone reprimanded for leaving the cover up?), to drink from the carbonated burstThe colorful metallic sheen on the aluminum reflects into glazed eyes, drunk on smooth edges and nostalgic feelingsYou can ignore the jagged bits of metal that sometime catch on your lip as you drink, not to cut, but to unpleasantly jolt you from your enjoyment.
Quail is very dryLike turkey can beMost people like to wrap it in bacon to moisten it upI split mine down the middle so I have two haves and fry it in seasoned oilPlease don't overcook or you will have to choke it down like dust.
Roasted or smothered Smothered SERVES 6 6 quail (see note) 6 tablespoons butter 3 tablespoons flour 2 cups chicken broth 1/2 cup sherry wine salt and pepper Directions 12 doves can be substituted for the 6 quailSeason the quail with salt and pepperMelt butter in a heavy skillet and brown the quailRemove the quail to a baking dishAdd flour to the butter in the skillet and stir to combineSlowly add the chicken broth, sherry, salt and pepperMix well and pour over the quailCover and bake at 350 degrees for about 45 minutes - 1 hour or until the quail are doneThis is very good served over rice with some homemade biscuits6 medium sized shallots, peeled Pan Roasted 6 whole quails 2 teaspoons kosher salt 1 teaspoon freshly ground pepper 2 tablespoons olive oil Preheat the oven to 400 degrees FPlace 1 shallot into the cavity of each quailSeason the quail with salt and pepperHeat the olive oil over high heat in a large heavy bottomed ovenproof skilletPlace the quail in the skillet breast side down and cook until the skin is golden brown in colorTurn the quail and cook for 3 more minutesPlace the skillet directly in the oven and roast for approximately 10 minutesLet the quail rest for 5 minutes before serving.
ThawUsing poultry shears, cut down both sides of the backbone and removeFlattenBreast side down on grill for 3 minutes, flip, 3 minutesThat's basic stuffExperiment with oil and spice on your own timeConsult old school Joy of Cooking.
This is certainly not a poorly written paragraph, but there is something that I perceive to be a fatal flaw in the entire presentation considering what you have stated is the assignment: This is not really in any way a 'description of a soda can', but it a rather pointed editorial responseDescriptive writing and commentary are not in any way the same thingOne is objectively detailing and articulating the appearence (perhaps even the function) of the said object or individual or idea, while a commentary is a strick opinion pieceAnd while this is an amusing and frankly rather entertaining editorial (and I believe your ending to not be pretentious, but more hitting a stride)However, depending upon the teacher in question (and you likely know what they are interested in receiving in response), this might get you an unexpected (and, prose-wise, undeserved) lower mark than you might be anticipatingEDIT ONE: Considering your apparent ability with language, I have to believe you can make a more flat description excitingTake an example (I will write on the 'beer can' to seperate myself from your assignment): The beer can itself is really less of a shape than an object without set formPoured into a mold and intricately designed with graphs and seams and scaffolds, the shape it initially takes is really that of molten, amorpous liquid, frozen down into an idea of practical usage in an age of diminishing effortsThe can finds the hands of a college boy, of three adults rocking back and forth before the blips on their television screen; in the grizzled grasp of the low-rent alcoholic or the sweaty palms of the surreptitious teenAnd, in the end, the shiny silver or red or blue or green or golden or finally dripping brown fluidity is mashed back down into its once formless mass to be poured back into molds at the recycling plant where it is chopped down and hacked again into the moiling plastic and cardboarded ends of a mass marketed tin of biscuts-
