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help make the sentance descriptive?

I feel the rug cushioning my feet , the fluffy yarn like strings are rainbow colored ,and swallow most of the floorThe stair case walls match the tan carpet as I linger up the straight stairsEveryday I turn into my murky street { first sent of essay}and is this a good sentance what should i change if it isnt:Inside my house the plain white walls seem to close in all around me , the small decorations of paintings and vases catch my eye like a desolate tree with one last leafwhat should i change in these sentances to make them flow and be better descriptive for an essay thanks

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It's Possible That The More Transfer Evidence That Is Found, The Less Likely A Claim Of Accidental Transfer Would Be BelievedThere's A Case In The UK Where GSR Or Gun Shot Residue Evidence Has Been Ruled As Insufficient Forcing A Retrial Due To The Fact That Such A Small Trace Was FoundIt's Hard To Say As It Is Possible To Tell What A Fabric Is From Just One Strand Of FibreI Hope This Is Of Some Help To You?
first sentencesomehow I can't get the sense that a rug can swallow a floorChoose another word, like smother, or surround,or envelopingAlso fluffy yarn and strings are opposites, maybe a better choice of words would be 'like rainbow colored cotton?' I would change the word yarn to fiberssecond sentencewhat makes the street murky? third sentence seems fine, I wouldn't change a thing.

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