I bought an American hss strat a couple days agothey said it was an american deluxe strat, but i looked up the serial numbers and its a 2005 standard stratit has a s1 switch and a better bridge than the standard stratswhat is this guitar?
Ha! I never thought I could get so much enjoyment out of reading a little paragraph about a soda pop canYou're first sentence caught me right awayThe soda can is a disgusting objectI smiled at that :)As for that one part, I didn't know what you meant when you said the slick cylinderThe only thing that is cylinder is the pop can itself, but I don't think you meant thatSomething in that sentence confused meI did, however, like your reference to the lid thingy on the pop can as a toilet seatVery clever! Overall, I loved it and wouldn't change a thing(except that one part maybe)!!!
i think you should take that part out! cause there's no way to put the lid back down on a soda can lol but everything else is amazing! i love how you compare it to a toilet loli never thought about it like that!
Sorry, but I'm going with pretentiousFind some stronger adjectives and adverbs, but don't overloadIt can't just mean the right thing- it should sound right, look right, feel right, taste rightConsider adding some metaphors and personificationThe second person narrative is a little gimmicky- try first person insteadTighten it, tooIt drifts a bit, leaping unconnected from topic to topic with false starts and sudden stopsTry to put it in the present, with everything happening now, not 'could' or 'might' or 'can' or 'did' or 'was'Authority! Is! Now! Then! It feels a bit stiltedYou have a couple of run-on sentences and a lot of stumbling language.
If I was your professor (or teacher), I would call it mediocre Here's why: you already went over what describes a beer can and the assignment is to describe a soda canYou included nothing in your paragraph that couldn't be said about a beer can You need to set the soda can apart from a beer can For a start, I would stress more of the colorfulness of the can (most would probably agree that soda cans have vibrant colors)But you need to think of ways to let the reader know its a soda can not a beer canOh and don't start with the soda can., its too elementaryI would mention it at the end of the first or beginning of the 2nd sentence.
Ryan, a Fender Deluxe Stratocaster will typically come from the factory with upgraded pickups (sometimes noiseless), machine tuners (locking), bridge (two-point fulcrum, machined saddles, and pop-in tremolo arm), fretboard markers (abalone or pearl), electronics (S-1 switching, no-load tone control), and sometimes an LSR roller nutDepending on the serial number (always check before you buy pre-owned instruments), it is most likely an American Standard that has had Deluxe parts added (I have done this on both my MIA Stratocasters)I doubt it is a MIM version, as the MIA two-point bridge would be incompatible with the 6-point narrow-spacing arrangement without modifying the bodyIf you post pictures and the serial number, I may be able to help furtherBest regards, Dana
