ok well im debating weather or not we should have uniforms and i want uniformsso far i have -safety-people are not judged by clothes-no cliques-no violence (with gangs)and thats about iti am almost finished i just need like 2 more key pointsi am not asking you to do all the research for it.its just a main ideathats all i needi will do the rest after that. THANKS!!!
Personaly i dont like the - wait what?! just seems a little unprofesional. also Elven, not elfin. besides that it's pretty good.
It depends on the county and city. Call the fire dept.
The best advise I ever got about a query letter. Just get a visual in your mind of a big fancy office, with a red carpet and a cigar smoking agent sitting there. He's obviously a very busy man and defintely heard it all. Blue three piece business suit with a club tie. Can you see that in your mind? Now here comes the challenge. Are you ready? You now have exactly 1 minute to tell him why the hell he should give a damn about fire elves. Okay, I don't mean that to be rude. But I hope you see what I'm trying to get at here. When you're trying to sell your book, it's probably best to get to the point. This query letter, unfortunately doesn't seem to do that at least not in my opinion. The same person who gave me that bit also suggested just telling them the best part, even if it does ruin the whole plot. These guys want to know what makes your story special. But I'm not a professional. I haven't writen a whole lot of query letters and have yet to be published myself. You can take my opinion for whatever you feel its worth.
