What would happen if I didn't use one? I'm bolting together pieces of wood and do not have enough clearance to use a washer and a locking washer - how bad would that be?
wow! u immediatley grabbed my attention. GREAT DETAIL! wow i want to read this story..it seems very interesting i hope it gets published and i will one day read it!!!:d
I agree with Andy. I can feel the effort you put in to trying to convey the characters feelings. The key to good writing is for that to be invisible. Try using less adjectives and delving into the characters mind a bit more. Some writing courses would help channel your writing and give structure. Don't feel dejected, you have obvious potential and taking on feedback is what makes a good book great.
Agree I liked his old theme better,and I think it suits him better than Cult of Personality. Even through the Darkest days this Fire burns always Those lyrics remind me of Punk. BQ:Also Raw was awesome tonight,and I am so glad Cm Punk is back.
It's definitely something I would read.
